Those that I awarded the Sunshine Award and are authors, I also passed this award on to you:
The Desert Rocks
PK Hrezo
Scarlett Rains
Beth Muscat
The Life of a Novice Writer
Yesterday's Daughter
You go to page 77 of your manuscript/book and copy and paste your 7 lines from the 7th paragraph.
That taken care of, what brought up this subject is because I listed my lines. Alas, of all lines, I've felt these to be stilted and in need of fixing, so I was rather embarrassed it fell to these. It was a good thing though, because I realize I cannot keep putting the correction of these lines off any farther.
Two of my chapters in 'Always' deal with the Great Plague. This was not the first time that England had been ravaged by this ugly and uncontrollable monster. As I researched, I thought of what it must have been to live through this horror. So many lives taken, how much sadness over the loss of loved ones? How lost the doctors must have felt, not knowing what caused it and how to stop it. The death toll was frightening, and loved ones dumped in those public pits?
The Bubonic Plague lives on today, but thankfully for antibiotics, it is curable. Most commonly used are gentomyacin and streptomyacin. Rodents still carry this disease, along with prairie dogs, lice, fleas, and chipmunks (among others). Be careful when out in wildlands, and that includes many federal and state parks.
These two chapters are the dark parts of my book as my characters face the horrors of this unseen invader. So, to make up for those awful passages last time, here is Chapter 4 from 'Always'.
Chapter Four
The Great Plague
The Bubonic Plague reached England in 1348.
It would continue to return with all its horror throughout the 17th
century, with deaths reaching as high as 60 percent of the population in some
areas.
In the autumn of 1665, the Plague, now
referred to as the Black Death, returned to the Isles and stayed into 1666. As it had done before, it spread rapidly and
left sorrow in its tracks. The death
rate averaged 75 percent, thus its name - The Great Plague. The last major outbreak in the Isles, an
estimated 100,000 had perished, before it ceased killing. Four out of five people died within the
first eight days. Infected homes were
boarded up, the survivors left inside to meet their doom. A red cross was
painted on the doors of the condemned buildings with the words “Lord have mercy
on us.”
Dead bodies were collected in the evenings,
piled in carts, and transported outside cities and villages for quick burials
in public pits. Fires built with strong
smelling materials such as pepper, hops, and frankincense burned ceaselessly in
an effort to cleanse the air. People
were encouraged to smoke in the hopes smoking might save them.
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Edgar, exhausted, could do nothing except
sit on the chair and wait. His jacket
lay on the floor. His white dress shirt,
with stains and sweat, clung to his chest. He had opened the door and window
shutters, hoping for fresh ventilation, but the air in the stone cottage remained
stifling. The humidity from the upcoming
storm was unbearable and he wished the rain would start soon and usher in fresh
breezes.
He held Lydia’s limp, grey hand as she lay on
the bed in a pool of sweat. He murmured
soothing words to her while she moaned and coughed in pain, barely alive. Soon his wife would leave him forever.
With his left hand, Edgar cleared off the
sweat from his forehead, nose and chin, and wiped it on his shirt. Releasing Lydia’s hand, he dipped a rag in
the bowl of silt water, wiped her face, shoulders, and arms; and moistened her
mouth. He smiled at her, but she didn’t recognize
him.
“Soon, my dear, you will see your parents
and our twins.”
“My fault.
My fault. I caused this. My fault,”
she murmured.
“You did no wrong. How could you know?”
“Edmond, Emma, forgive me,” she cried out hoarsely.
“Darling, shh. Allowing Edmond and Emma to walk to the
printing office while you went to the orphanage did not cause the curse.”
Lydia grew silent.
Edgar could only wait while her occasional
cries for forgiveness cut through him.
He sat by her side as the hours ticked; she lay motionless and quiet.
When Healer Cliona arrived yesterday, she warned
him to expect Lydia’s death within the next 24 hours unless they found fresh
water. Edgar wept. Whether the tears he shed were for the ending
of her suffering, or sadness for losing her, he did not know.
Lydia lived beyond her expected time. He sat with her as much as he could, dozing
off once in a while. When she sighed, he
would awaken, soothe her with soft murmurings, and wet her mouth. He ached all over. His throat burned. The river ran low as a result of the draught,
and they ran short of drinking water. What he could find he used for his wife,
taking little for himself.
Lydia muttered, “Forgive me…” and became
silent.
“Remember this song? Your favorite?” Edgar hummed the tune softly. “How I enjoy your enchanting voice. I wish I could hear you sing again.”
He dipped the rag in the basin and, holding
her mouth open with one hand, he wet her dry tongue. He ran the rag over her hair, mopping up some
of the sweat. She had not been bathed in
days. He tried to clean her; however, her
cries of pain sliced through him, and he quit, afraid to distress her more. She carried the stench of her affliction. She smelled of sweat, of dirty clothes, vomit,
and the herbs Healer Cliona used. Lydia
used to smell of jasmine. Edgar lifted
her handkerchief from his jacket pocket and inhaled the sweet fragrant scent.
They were out of supplies, so Cliona shared her
remaining staples. She camped outside
their door and kept a healing broth warm over a fire.
No support came from the village. They knew the plague lived at the cottage and
dared not come near.
Food no longer mattered. Lydia could not swallow. Edgar refused to eat while he watched his
wife suffer on death’s bed.
“Kek-kek caw.”
Edgar looked through the tiny window. On the barren tree, the sparrow hawk called
to the evening. “Kek-kek caw.”
“Take me to my God!” Lydia screamed, and then she became silent once
more.
“Kek-kek caw.
Kek-kek caw. Kek-kek caw.”
“Shoo.” He waved his hand at the bird.
He had chased it away when they first arrived. Lydia, conscious then, begged him to let the
hawk stay. He remembered their
conversation, the last time she spoke coherently.
“The bird protects me from evil,” she had whispered. “He says he is my friend and waits to lead me
Home to God.”
“You are feverish, my darling. Rest. Forget
that bird,” Edgar had responded.
“Kek-kek caw,” sang the sparrow hawk.
The cawing grated on Edgar. He feared the sparrow hawk lingered nearby
because Lydia’s death drew near.
God. Where was God while the plague ravaged the
Isles? Where was God’s resolution when I
begged Him to save Emma and Edmond? Why
did God not help Lydia when I prayed to Him to heal the love of my life? I gave generously of my money when the Church
asked. Lydia sacrificed many hours at
the orphanage. We attended church every
Sunday. God has turned away from the Isles, and God has turned His back on me
and my family.
Edgar accepted Cliona’s offer in response to
God’s perceived neglect. The Church disapproved
of these pagan healers. Edgar could be sentenced to prison or death for dealing
with her. Especially a man of his prominence. If he lost Lydia, what care did he have for living? God paid no attention. The doctor did not dare approach the
cottage. Only the Celtic Healer Cliona came
by, and her reward? Death at the hands of the soldiers.
“Kek-kek caw.”
“Your call pierces my soul. Shout out then. When I can bear no more pain, I too will die,”
he cried to the bird.
“God,
why am I not sick? Why did you take my
twins? Why must you nip my Lydia?” he asked.
Edgar rubbed Lydia’s hand. She did not respond to his touch. He sat in the chair and closed his eyes. “Soon, my Sweet, you will see your God.”
For days, Lydia screamed Edgar’s name, oblivious
that he sat beside her. He wished he
didn’t have to watch his darling suffer.
Why can she not die quickly? Why does God not call her Home? Why is He letting her suffer? Can you hear my pleadings, God? Then I beg of you, release her from her pain.
Tirelessly, he had answered her cries. “I am with you, my Precious One. Always.”
His words would calm her. He repeated
this phrase today with no reaction from her, until he voiced no more than a
raspy whisper.
After screaming, she would lay back down, engulfed
in silence and restless sleep. Now,
she did not move. She hovered between
her glorious Heaven and her tormented hell.
Think
about anything else, he willed his mind while rubbing his brow.
He went back to the day when he met Lydia. Twelve years ago, he argued with his parents over
marrying her. Lydia’s family was nouveau
riche and no nobility established in their line. Yet she was well educated. And divine.
Remarkably divine. Edgar ran into her on a street one day as he walked
to meet his friends. She was hurrying
along, running errands for the orphanage.
Her fragrance stopped him. When he
looked into her eyes, it seemed he had always known her. He knew then that he loved her and he ached for her with an intense passion from that moment on.
“Dear sir, please permit me to pass,” she said.
Edgar weakened at the sound of her voice and
smiled. “I will kindly let you pass, fair
lady, if you invite me to dinner tonight.”
“I am not acquainted with you, sir. It is impolite of you to approach me like
this.” She looked insulted.
Edgar motioned for the nearest shopkeeper and
whispered into the man’s ear.
“May I introduce you to Mr. Edgar Umbridge, Tax
Collector for the King?” the man announced.
Edgar waved him back to his store.
“How do you do. What a pleasure to make your acquaintance.” Edgar removed his hat and bowed.
Embarrassed, she had curtseyed, “I am Lydia. The
shopkeeper is my father.” She waved at
her dad.
Edgar grinned as he remembered their
encounter.
Lydia moved to walk past. He stepped in front of her, no matter which
way she went. She looked to her father
for help.
“I need lower taxes, not higher, my
daughter. Do as he requests and invite
him to our house.”
Lydia sighed.
Looking down, she asked, “I request you join us for dinner at our home
on the corner of Sterling Street.” She
curtsied.
“Tonight?
Well, I must check my schedule,”
Edgar retorted.
Her face turned red. “Dear sir,” she spoke softly, “you embarrass
me.”
“Seven o’clock tonight?” he remarked loudly. “I am pleased to accept your invitation and
meet your parents.” He stood aside and
Lydia swept past him and continued down the street.
He knew they would marry. He could not live without her; he needed her,
always. His affection for Lydia burned
intensely. His desire for her consumed
him days and nights. Now, his guilt for
her pain etched down into his heart. If we had not married, she would be free of
this affliction. How I argued with my parents. I would marry Lydia and no one else, with or
without their blessing. When they
finally agreed, our wedding day seemed like it would never arrive. How exquisite my bride looked. My passion for her overwhelmed me that day. I loved her throughout our wedding night and
the next day too.
Edgar came back from his thoughts for a moment. “Darling,
remember the birth of our twins? When I
held them in my arms? A fatherly love swept through me to the depths of my soul.
Their tiny hands and their eyes blue like yours awakened such deep feelings
within me. How Edmond relished life and nature. He often came home with stray
cats. I never let him keep one. What would have been the harm? I should have let him.” Edgar sighed deeply.
“Such a smart child mystified with his
environment. I took pride in his writing
talent. Did I relate to you that Mr. Snyder
was impressed with him and thanked me every time he spotted me for apprenticing
Edmond to him? And what of Emma’s temper? Most stubborn for a young lady. She listened
to Edmond though.”
Lydia struggled to draw a breath. Edgar looked out the window. “When my father died and then my mother a few
months after him, I vowed to keep you and the children safe. Instead, look what I’ve done. God has a wry
sense of justice. He is a vengeful God.”
“My God.
My God. I want to come Home,
Father.” Lydia groaned.
“Save your energy, my Dearest. I’m sorry to grieve you.” Edgar wiped the sweat from her face and arms. I will
soon be a man without a family.
After his Lydia died, his last remaining
relative would be his older half-brother from his father’s first wife. Lewis
and his family lived in Italy a portion of the year. Even when Lewis came to England, he rarely spent
time with Edgar.
Lydia’s weeping broke his reverie. Edgar wet her mouth and kissed her forehead. He reminisced of the day when the children
came home with a filthy dog they found in the street; a hunting dog who wandered
into the city hungry and hurt. They and
Lydia begged to keep him and Edgar couldn’t refuse. They named him Hunter. Hunter favored Edgar, and Edgar looked
forward to their walks.
When
I learned about the scourge, I let no one out except Hunter, still the children
became ill. If only I found out one day
sooner. Lydia and I comforted them the
best we could. When the doctor warned me
our dog might be the carrier, I saw only one choice. I needed to save my loved ones.
“Hunter,” Edgar yelled, “forgive me my
injustice to you.” A chill swept over
him. If we had had a cat instead, I would
have left him outside. The dog stayed
indoors and I thought it cruel to leave him out.
Why
didn’t I suggest I wanted to walk him?
Why did I tell them? Why did I choose
the backyard to hit him in the head with a rock? I desperately believed they’d feel
better. I murdered them as sure as I
killed Hunter. At least I buried the dog. My children received no such honor.
Edgar wiped his wet face. I made many mistakes, which cost me the
lives of those I love.
“Dear Lydia, I am the one who needs to
apologize. How you and the children
cried. I chose wrongly, which caused the
death of our children. They were in
torment throughout the night even though we held them and sang to them. In the late morning they died. I am sorry, Lydia.” Edgar wiped his face.
She gave no response.
I am
glad I had the foresight to gather the family papers and to write a letter to my
brother. I pray
they are safe in Europe so the Umbridge line will continue. The letter accounted for everything. Edgar delivered it to a doctor he knew well. The doctor gave him some medicine to ease the
children’s pain, and let him know Lydia’s parents had succumbed. He also informed Edgar that dogs and cats were no
longer considered to be the carriers.
He sat in the chair in the cottage, his eyes
moist, re- hearing his children’s screams from their room to save their precious
dog. He remembered Lydia’s cries for Hunter. He could still hear the loud crack and Hunter’s
whimper. Their pet moved no more.
Edgar looked up. “God, I will never own another dog.”
The doctors held no hope for either Edgar
or Lydia. Confined to their home, Lydia
mourned the children, her parents, and Hunter.
At nightfall, the men came. He
had no choice except to let them collect his children’s bodies, which were
unceremoniously thrown on the pile of dead corpses and carted away to a public
burial spot. Edgar and Lydia had dressed
them in their finest and kissed them one last time. For
what? That cold loveless pit?
Edgar had grasped at his last chance to save his
wife. He paid the men handsomely not to label the door, assuring them he and
Lydia showed no symptoms. He knew Lydia lay
in bed, her underarm swollen and the onset of a fever. They accepted the bribe, however he understood
they would return the next day to board up the house and paint the red cross.
Lydia’s voice interrupted Edgar’s musings.
“Forgive me, Edgar.” She shivered.
“You need not ask forgiveness, Darling. You weren’t the reason the illness spread.” He
doubted she could hear him, nonetheless, he insisted she know she had no faults. He soaked the rag and dripped water into her
dry mouth. “Rest, my darling. Sleep.”
He blamed himself for the decision to hide out here. He had hoped the fresh air and pristine water
would support her health.
“My sweet,
do you remember how we got out of the city?
How we left out the back of the house? You wouldn’t leave without your
Murano bowl Mother had given us as a wedding present. I secured our bedroom door on my back. We must have looked a sight walking down the
streets late at night with me stooped over and packages dangling from me and
you carrying your bowl.” Edgar smiled at
her. “I must apologize for my packing in
a hurry. I brought such few medicines
and foods, and one change of clothing.”
Lydia lay still, without a sound.
“It seemed a perfect plan,” he squeezed her
hand slightly, “until your fever worsened.
I still waited to leave after dark.
I chose infected areas. It gave
us a better chance to escape. Wailings
and screams from those homes…” Edgar
choked on his words and bit his bottom lip.
He inhaled and let it out slowly. “Thick smoke loomed everywhere from the
fires. We made it to the river,
though. I floated the door and assisted
you while you climbed on, covered you with your shawl, and surrounded you with
packages. I pushed the door along the shoal to here.”
“The starry night guided us, Lydia, and I knew
our dear children followed with us, watching over our safety. You slept peacefully. I prayed for your health, my darling. Somewhere you dropped the bowl.” Edgar swallowed with difficulty. “We didn’t know the river was low. I didn’t think the plague would reach here before
us.”
He stared out of the window.
“As you worsened, I promised if you got
better, I would buy you every Murano glass item I could find.”
“Where…I…bowl?” she muttered.
“Shh, my love. It is safe.
No worries.”
He remembered when they arrived, how he
dragged the door out of the water. He
carried her inside and laid her on the bed.
He changed into his clean clothes, kissed her, and proceeded to the
village. As morning approached, he could
see the outlines of the large rocks where he and Edmond fished in the summers. He could see the oak trees lining the way to the village.
Village guards were at the entranceway.
“I need to see the doctor,” Edgar announced.
“Sorry, no in or out,” declared one man.
“Mr. Umbridge, sir?” asked the other man.
“It is I.
Hello Tom. How is your
family?” Tom ran errands for the
Umbridge’s when they stayed at the cottage.
“I lost them, sir, the five children and my
wife too.”
“I am sorry to hear of your losses. Tom, I need to see
the doctor.”
“I’ll fetch him, sir. Wait there.”
Tom returned quickly with the doctor who refused
to go to the cottage.
“The church is full of sick people. I can’t leave them. I’ll give you what medicine I can, Mr.
Umbridge. I’m sorry.” The doctor turned and walked away.
“Mr. Umbridge, sir,” said Tom. “watch out for the soldiers. They’re everywhere. They tend to kill anyone on the roads. Their job is to constrain them that’s sick
from spreading it to others, but they don’t even ask. No, sir, they don’t even ask.”
“Thank you, Tom. I’ll be careful.”
Edgar walked towards the cottage,
discouraged. The Celtic Healer Cliona
walked up beside him.
Remembering her, he smiled.
“You smell of death and the plague,” she had
called.
“Go away, senile old woman. You cannot help.”
“My herbs will ease her suffering. I can perform a healing ritual.”
“Your ways are superstitious and pagan. The Church and God forbid them.”
“God has not ordered me to quit healing
others. Has he told you I must not give
comfort?”
“Leave me alone, I say. Trifle not in my affairs. I deny your pagan practices.”
“You think I am a crazy woman. You are the insane one not to let me save
your wife.”
Edgar
walked with longer strides. When he glanced
back she was gone.
Cliona had followed him at a distance and watched
him enter the cottage. She waited each
day, knowing he would try to get the doctor’s help in the village and he would
be gone at least an hour. Once he left,
she entered the house. She gave Lydia a
broth of herbs to drink and then performed a cleansing ritual.
One day he returned earlier than usual. When he entered the cottage, he spotted whiffs
of smoke. He heard chants and giggling. Lydia’s giggles. He ran to the bedroom. Lydia sat up in bed, sipping a broth. Cliona
danced and sang around the room with a bunch of smoking leaves in a basket.
“Lydia, I was ecstatic the day you sat up
in bed, looking better. Then I knew
Cliona could cure you. She cared about
you. The odor of lemongrass still lingers
in our room. Can you smell it? She and I became friends. She came every day and you got better. I knew you were going to live…until the water ran
out. She could no longer make broth.”
He ran his fingers through his hair.
Crazy
old woman.
Edgar gazed down at Lydia. It had been hours since she had stirred. Cliona stated he would know when she died,
when to bury his wife. Her end seemed
imminent since she could no longer draw enough breaths. He kissed her lips gently.
He looked at her, held between worlds. He wanted desperately to hold her in his
arms; to feel her soft lips pressed against his, to hear her whisper, “I will
love you always.”
“Our wedding day ushered in a glorious
beginning to our union. Your death will
be a tragic ending to it - so undeserved.”
Edgar wiped the sweat from his face. He desired a few minutes of badly needed sleep
but refused his wish in order to be awake when Lydia died. If he slept, he wouldn’t hear her cries, which pained him deep within. How he yearned to ease her misery.
Edgar leaned the back of his head on the wall
behind him. He had been sitting in the uncomfortable
wooden chair for hours. What to ponder
about while he waited? Cliona and her
last hours. And Tiny.
Thank you for dropping by and reading this chapter.
LHR, my dear friends and PAWS for success.

22 comments:
Its an event that left quite an indelible mark on our psyche I often think. Have you ever read 'Doomsday Book' by Connie Willis? I usually consider it the work of fiction that has made the biggest impact on me with such vivid characterisation set against the Plague.
Sharon, thank you for your comment. I have never read that book, so it's on my list now. It was tough for my emotions to write 2 chapters on the struggles during that time. I cannot imagine writing an entire book about it.
Hi Donna. Just dropped by to say hello. Your chapter moved me to tears. So sad to think what that family, and others, endured. To kill a beloved dog, as your children begged you not to, only to find out it was not a carrier. That part, and several others, broke my heart.
Scarlett, thank you for dropping by and for reading this chapter. It was indeed a difficult time.
It’s truly terrifying to think about so many people dying in such a short space of time. I’ve just read your words with tears running down my face.
Barbara, thank you for your comment. Although I hate to think I was responsible for tears, you have honored me as a writer by saying this. I think the real horror for me would be standing by, watching my loved ones suffer and die, and not being able to do one thing about it. Truly one of the greatest horrors of our history.
This is heartbreaking, Donna. What do you do to release yourself from the emotions after you are done writing these chapters?
Scrollwork, thank you for your comment. I put it aside and walk away, doing something else until I can get back to it. Kelly Hashway
in one of her latest posts, http://kellyhashway.blogspot.com/2012/04/feeling-of-ya-books.html also talked about the emotions a writer feels when working on the story.
Aw, thanks for referring Scrollwork to my blog post, Donna. So sweet of you.
This setting you have certainly lends itself to great emotion. Nicely done!
You're welcome, Kelly. Thank you for your comment.
Donna- I also enjoyed this post and thought it was moving. I can't imagine living back then with so many illness that no one knew how to stop! I know we have our share now, but we have come along way with medicine.
Thanks for sharing!
~Jess
Jess, thank you for commenting. Yes, I think it must have been a horrible time to live.
Your words pulled me in quickly - such a sad time in history!
OneMommy, thank you for your comment. It was definitely a sad time.
Plagues always trip me out... I'm fascinated at what so many have endured.
Thank you for the award, Donna!!
PK, you deserved the award, and you're welcome. I'm amazed at human endurance during times like that. It is something to study the resiliency of people when stretched to their limits.
Wow! It's so personal and detailed. Very well done.
Christina, thank you for your comment. I so appreciate your words.
Thanks for the award Donna. I got this one a couple of times in the last month and I'm trying not to get into blog hops and memes too much. I totally appreciate it though. I feel very honored!
My favorite number is 7 and have you tried Coke Zero?
The Desert Rocks, thanks for your comment. I did try coke zero once, but it just tasted so awfully sweet.
Thanks for the link :)
Oh my gosh! What a fantastically written chapter! It made me teary eyed more than once - especially the futility of his killing the dog. That was so human. loved it!!
Joleene, thank you for your comment, and you are welcome. I'm thrilled that you, one of my fav authors, likes this chapter.
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